The kill

by David   Apr 14, 2007


There is a fight over you
Two battling away
Trying to prove their love
There will be bloodshed today

Armour and shields
Fall deep in the skin
Leave deep, deep scars
Their ambition is to win

A cut to the hand
Stabbing of the heart
Stumbling to the ground
His existence falling apart

The sword twirls around
Raises it above the victors head
' Please spare my life lad '
It's all the loser said

Yet the sword plummets down
So swiftly with skill
Buries deep in the flesh
The kill

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  • 16 years ago

    by Jodie Phillips

    Very well written loved it...

  • 16 years ago

    by Sora

    Woww.
    i loved this one probaly the most. it was powerful and deep.

    A cut to the hand
    Stabbing of the heart
    Stumbling to the ground
    His existence falling apart

    that stanza was my all time favorite. especially, "his existence is falling apart" part.
    i dont think i've read anything like this one before.
    Amazing jobb. 5/5.

    -Ashlei.

  • 16 years ago

    by Diabolic Atrocity

    Awesome poem, very imaginable. I love how you rhymed it and how easily it flowed, gave you a 5! ^_~

  • 17 years ago

    by Noelle Wright

    This poem makes me feel sad...for the loser....='(

    Noelle

  • 17 years ago

    by Ducky Ramone

    This is amazing. keep up the good work. :)

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