Forever alone

by firexdancer   Apr 14, 2007


What would it be like to live in those waters?
Its fingers caressing your skin.
So beautiful to live in those waters,
drenched in the black depths of sin.

It would still be so sad to swim by yourself,
missing the light's sweet song,
trying to make your own melody,
but can't ever catch up, can't move along.

The pull of the river so pretty,
so easy to go with the flow.
The waters rippling eternity,
time does never slow.

If even you can taste this lust,
for this place you one day might see.
Then you are one of those people,
those people such as me.

So if you come near our rivers,
walk slowly into our lair.
You will for once feel happiness,
as your dusky hearts we'll tear.

We bathe in the icy waters,
faces unseen and unknown.
You can tell we're the cursed spirits,
truly, forever alone.

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  • 17 years ago

    by Nix

    Wow, last stanza is so powerful and you expressed your self excellently, rhythm of this poem is also superb, I like the imagery. You have one mistake, you used word-waters- twice in first stanza which leaves bad impression. Anyway greatly written piece.

  • 17 years ago

    by Choose xX Alex Xx Life

    I love the way you ask a quesiton to start then answer it and describe it well.

    xxx alex xxx

  • 17 years ago

    by Ashleigh Skye

    Wow this was very beautiful.. and ominus(sp?) it kind of remined me of like a witches chant in the horror movies. Amazing. I love it. The last verse was definatly my favorite because it wrapped up the poem yet that single verse was so powerful that it could stand on its own if need be. Amazing word choices. I loved everything about this one. it was truely fantastic.

  • 17 years ago

    by Marc Ortiz

    I love this poem! beautiful! well penned!

  • 17 years ago

    by Simple Sensation

    Intresting read. I really loved the description you have used in this, and the dark subject keeps the reader wanting to read more. The overall peom sends shivers running down teh readers back. The rhyming of the poem was good, as well as the overall pace of the poem. Youve kinda got this kindof metaphor in this work havnt you? I really enjoyed that... especially in the secound stanza. The entire poem seemed really strong, i liked your structure, and it has a good flow. Thank you for your comments and yeah i did enjoy reading your poems! :) Keep them up! xx

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