Thanks a lot! I'll definitely return the favor.

For a thirteen year old you have quite remarkable vocabulary. I liked the descriptions in this poem, it had great imagery and the flow wasn't choppy at a lot of parts.

"The winds she blew and fantasies she drew
Allowed crisp stars to steal her breath"

^^ I really liked those lines, something in them really stood out for me, I think it was the crisp stars part haha. Keep up the great work. ^_^

The winds she blew and fantasies she drew
Allowed crisp stars to steal her breath

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Best lines in this poem i read were the above. Your vocab like i said in the other comment has improved alot it is amazing now. i can tell you've listened to what people have said on how to fix some things up and you've done it really well. Good job 5/5 ~mel

Another great write!
Normally I don't like to read Suicidal or deep depression poems, but this one is awesome.
Keep up the great work! God Bless 5/5
<3Tayyy

Wow.
writing should never be a sin.
i adored this one, as i did the last.
5/5.