by ~*SugarCube*~ Apr 14, 2007
category :
Sadness, depression /
about depression
The pain is overwhelming, the pain never leaves. |
by K3LSI3
Good poem...in some way i felt like i could relate to it.i felt like i could see what was happening right in front of me. |
Hm.. I liked this one however I didnt get as into it as I did with the other two that you recomended I read. I think it had something to do with the randomness of the stanzas as well as the no rhyme scheme I think that if you were to fix that up a bit this would be a much better peice to read. |
by stefanie
This is a sad one. the flow was great and very emotional. great job. |
by isabel
Very nice poem... |
by Kaitlyn
I like this, but i feel as if in the end the flow was thrown off completley, but tahts not ahrd to fix. |