Ok i really liked this poem i think you word choice has stepped up from some of your older poems which is really great. I loved the repetition it was great! and this story was good for a cutting poem seeing as people are saying they are getting sick of reading them me though i never do. Really interesting. Well done ~mel

Wow. This was an amazing poem. It was so intense and powerful. The flow was good most of the time, the rhymes worked and the descriptions were excellent. I love the detail and metaphors you put into it. Wonderful job hun. 5/5

Wow, really intense and detailed poem!
Great write! The flow was flawless.
The rhythem of the poem was great.
Keep it up! God Bless 5/5
<3Tayyy

Pretty bloody love.
yet i quite adored it.
very well penned.
5/5