Oh I love this. Such an original idea, it's good to read something different. The flow was great, as was the rhyming, which sometimes is hard to do without sounding forced. You did it well. The vocab suits it very well too. Well done. =] 5/5

Tammie

Good poem. The flow was great and the rhyming wasn't forced.
I loved it all.
Keep it up 5/5

|Sarah|

Aweh that gave me shivers it was so sad. Great job Hun, I haven't read any of your work in a long time, but I am glad that I read this one. It really hit me. =)

5.5

Hey darl lot of emotion in this very powerfu. xx

Lovely poem hun.
it was amazing.
the rhyming scheme was great
and you went very into depth with it.
great job
5/5

Very good poem, really enjoyed it, keep up the good work. Check on my poems when you have the time.

Best Wishes
Wallace

I like the idea of this poem, great choice of words. and a great rhyme scheme, and concequently an amazing flow. Well descripted, and also rather deep! Great job! :P
Kirsty xxx

Stunning!! I love it.
And written on my birthday as wel.
:]