Fade Away

by Polly   Apr 15, 2007


My fade-away dream.

Melting into a numbed state
with no life in which to participate

Falling and fading out of skin and bone,
nerves of wire and emotions of stone

Smaller and smaller, the lighter I get,
my eyes can't see and my mind won't fret.

Where there was flesh there will be none.
And I shall float off into the sun.

Into the sun where there is only light.
No dark, no cold, no saddening night.

No feelings to handle and no poisonous breath,
no falling through madness and inevitable death.

No burning in my heart, no never-ending pain,
no chance to love something that I cannot gain.

No chance to fall, nowhere to fail
Just fading silently, up and away.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Sourav

    Nice poem to me. Very well written. Enjoyed it!

  • 16 years ago

    by Finalgravedigger

    I actually believe that the light is our downfall sometimes lol but nice poem. I can somewhat yet relate to the feeling.

  • 17 years ago

    by ~me~

    Polly thats amazing seriously
    double meaning as in ana mia and ash
    mabey i dont no just thoughts
    polly i loved it
    mwah i love you

  • 17 years ago

    by Dead Inside

    Simply beautifull. I love it! It kinda describes how i feel right now. :( Keep on writing.

    cesar

  • 17 years ago

    by ASPHYXIATED

    I really liked this one.
    The idea of just fading away sometimes seems so perfect.

    "Smaller and smaller [the] lighter I get,
    my eyes can't see and my mind [won't] fret."

    I thought here in the first line the repetition of "and" put off the flow so if you replaced it with "the" it still makes sense and flows fine.
    I also thought the same with "cant" and "wont" :]

    "Where there was [flesh] there will be none.
    And I shall float off into the sun."

    I think flesh gets your point more clearly across than fat.

    "No feelings to handle and no poisonous breath,
    no falling through madness and inevitable death[.]"

    That ^^ was my favourite stanza. Well done=)

    "No chance to fall, nowhere to fail
    Just fading silently, up and away."

    I think because the rest of the poem had a steady flow you shouldve tried to keep that flow untill the end.
    Instead of changing at the end.

    Good work. :o]

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