by Kayla Apr 15, 2007
category :
Sadness, depression /
lost relationships
On that day, |
Wow that was such a sad and powerful poem 5/5 |
by Artemis
Very beautiful and sad... a wonderful poem that really expresses yourself. |
The overall image of this poem was great. It was a typical thing that happens these days, which is awesome because than people can relate to it. However, I think the flow could be cleaned up a bit, as well as a stronger ending. The entirety of the poem was very strong, it sent a sad image, and than the ending was sort of dull. Don't get me wrong, it ends it to end it, and doesn't keep the reader in suspense..but you should work on piecing together the strength line by line instead of bunching it in the middle..and then the end should be a BAM type thing when you read it. |
by Wallace
Excellent! This is so sad, I love it, Check on some of my poems plzz |