Can you Imagine it?

by Hidden Feelings within these Words   Apr 16, 2007


Imagine the sun, moon and stars.
Can you just picture them from afar?
Do you smile with the sun at noon?
And at night dream of the stars and moon?

Imagine a day, so very sunny and bright.
A beautiful and peaceful day without a fright.
And now imagine the sun setting over the sea.
The day containing laughter, joy and peace is key.

Imagine the moon being surrounded by the stars at night.
Looking up at the sky, having only it for light.
Gazing off into space, you're in "Aww" and just sigh.
Dreaming up things so wonderful, that simply can't lie.

Now imagine the stars, so radiant and true.
in the sky that is so big and blue.
Sitting there staring without a single care.
The weather so beautiful, stary and fair.

One again, imagine the sun, moon and stars.
Can you now picture them from afar?
Will you smile with the sun at noon?
And tonight dream of the stars and moon?

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  • 17 years ago

    by Marc Ortiz

    Oh my such a wonderful poem! great imagery created in this poem! I like it! well done! another awesome poem from you! you're really talented! 5/5!

  • 17 years ago

    by Lonesomeme

    Wow...this is an awesome poem..I especially like how you contradicted yourself
    'Now imagine the stars, so radiant and true..
    in the sky that is so big and blue..
    Sitting there staring without a single care.
    The weather so beautiful, stary and fair.'

    The comparison with the stars and the blue sky, very good. 5/5 -Unattractive1

  • 17 years ago

    by Vanessa

    Now imagine the stars, so radiant and true..
    in the sky that is so big and blue..
    Sitting there staring without a single care.
    The weather so beautiful, stary and fair.

    I like that part the most. Well written. Excellent flow. 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Teria

    You should probably use more periods, and less of the dots "... "They're good when you're trying to give suspense through out poems, but this poem really didn't need much suspense. Your rhyming seemed a tad bit forced. Barely, but a little bit.

    You did a great job, overall. I thought it was a good poem. I loved how you asked questions. Poetry with questions always seems to grab the readers attention more. It was a great poem, as I already stated and it was cute. :D
    4/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Melpomene

    I liked how you repeated the first stanza and used it as the last, people usually cant pull off nature poems well but you did so. liked the title it caught my eye. Flowed nicely. Well done~mel

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