Comments : Your Game

  • 17 years ago

    by Melpomene

    This poem, i found the meaning behind the poem to be really strong and powerful, an interesting topic, although i did find the word choice to be how can i put it a little too simple compared to your other poems.

    It's clear you don't have real friends
    Because you keep playing this game
    Turning friends upon other friends
    And trying to drive them insane.

    This stanza i found the only error to be that you ryhmed "friends" with friends" I'm not sure wether or not there is another word you could ryhme it with but i wasnt so keen on that.

    Other then those few things i suggested, i do really like the meaning written behind this it was portrayed nicely and kept me intrigued.

    Well done with this nicely penned poem~mel

  • 17 years ago

    by Vanessa

    Wonderfully written poem, a few mistakes, but the flow was good, and the word choice excellent. you did a great job 5/5