by Kayla Apr 16, 2007
category :
Sadness, depression /
about death
Notes lay scattered on the desk, |
by Jenavia L G
This was deep and really hit home for me. |
by DirtRoadGirl
You are very talented. This grabs readers and forces them to see the pain that people all around us spend so much time trying to hide. Keep uyp the amazing work 5/5 <3 |
Dang girl. |
by Cyber Saiyan
What a way to express the pain held inside. Normally, people cant understand until its too late. |
You did amazing, Sis. This poem is one of the first in ages that has ever made me feel sorrow just by reading it. You made every stanza flow perfectly, and I loved how at the end you added the bit about the girl's tear line and single dot on the lonesome suicide note. It was very sad, but that is a good thing. You portrayed this emotion exactly as it should have been and it came across very clear. Your words were well chosen to set the tone, and I don't think anyone could have done a better job. I gave you a 5/5. Very, very well done Sis! |