Comments : Gone Forever

  • 17 years ago

    by LithiumSacrifice

    4/5 .. it was good. i gave it a 4 because i honestly like some more flow and rhyme to it. other then that is was excellent. i was able to feel what you were getting at and had a more clear storyline to it. good job. keep writting. :)

  • 17 years ago

    by Poetvoices

    I can tell this poem was a great release for you, though there was nothing special about it for me. I gave it a 4, but I think, now, it deserves a 3. Believe me, I know exactly how you're feeling. Friends being gone sucks.
    PV

  • 17 years ago

    by Vanessa

    It was a good read. A feeling that most people can relate to, having lost a friend at one time or another. Very nicely written, well pinned , and a good flow 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Melpomene

    I liked this poem alot im sure alot of people can relate to it. Although for a poem like this it should show stronger emotion i think if you added stronger vocab throughout this it would be alot more emotional and get the reader into it alot more. Good effort though. Well done~mel

  • Love ur poem it beautiful lol rate mine

  • 17 years ago

    by ASPHYXIATED

    Your title was catchy.
    Its powerful because it gave a time frame. Like you have no hope of ever renewing your relationship. I liked the power in such few words. Well done.

    I've recently written a poem around this topic so I do knwo where its coming from and I think you did good in expressing yourself.

    The poem itself could do with a little work.
    Maby stronger vocab.
    A more powerful structure or just adding a flow.

    But its a good start :]]
    Well done.