I loved this!

I love the way that the 1st and last stanza are reflected.
Your words are so hertfelt, I am there with you. Feeling your pain, remebering.

Sincerely, there is nothing I can say without trying to pick faults where they are not needed. your words are enough

Honeypot x

Wow, a very well written poem. I personally loved it. A lot of people think that free verse poems are just easy and no good....but they're actually a lot harder than rhyming ones, because in free verse you don't have rhyming to make up for lack of description and imagination...you have to make ever single word piece into the next, and I must say you did a WONDERFUL job at that. I might suggest capitalizing the first letter of each new stanza. In a few places it just seemed like you had a little to much description (not that it's always a bad thing) but sometimes all you need is one little word to pull a stanza together :] This line was perfect "and in my dreams I can't escape her" I loved it because I think we all know what it's like to fall asleep and be in the perfect world, and then have to wake up and face what’s real. You told a story within this poem, a story that many can understand and grieve with, I loved it 5/5

Personally I loved this. It was very well written and i could feel everything you were feeling when you wrote this. The floow slacked off a little bit in the middle, but it was regained quickly. I think that you are talented, and that you chose your words well. There is nothing wrong with constructive critism I don't think that your comments are too harsh, your advice actually helped me see things I didn't see before, after all that is what this r/r/c is for. Thank you for your comments. Keep up the good work 5/5

Wow. I thought this poem was amazing. I'm afraid to say I don't have the critique skills you possess, and so my comments will be no comparison. However, I don't feel that this poem could be improved upon, as it truly is a great write.

'broken smiles and fractured laughs'

I loved this line, and it's stanza, it just felt right, as though the lines connected perfectly. Once again, a truly well written piece of poetry.

Take Care - Sole.

Wow, i couldnt find anything wrong with this poem, so perfectly written, it is my first time reading a poem by you and i think you are one of the greatest one.........
thank you very much for the advices on my poem, it was very helpful

keep up the great job

Wow. this poem is so raw and emotional. I feel so sorry for the way you feel. I have felt that way before. All I did was dream of the life and love I used to have then wake up to the reality so afraid of another rejection, so afraid to trust another the way i gave my life to my first love. But all we need to do is put one foot in front of another and soon your heart will mend together again and soon you can reach to others for love you thought you would never beable to gie or recieve again. I hope things work out for you!

great poem all in all though!

sweet_rebellion

I thought this was well written. It flowed nicely and left me with the type of impression I look for at the end of some of the stanzas...a good taste in my mouth. I noted some small bit of word usage but not enough to distract from the poem. I mention it as I told you I would.

If I had written this poem, I word keep the thoughts and feelings intact except for where I would polish it a bit to convey more deeply what I'm feeling.

Beautiful poem. expressed your feelings amazingly. very raw and genuine. and there is always another answer. <3