I really enjoyes this! i loved the flow, and i can definatly relate to this, i particularly liked these lines,,,

"you'll never know the way i cry,
as i stand there in the light,
so happy i can touch the sun,
yet wishing it was night."

they stood out to me, and way great poem, and that you for the wonderful comment on mine, great work, keep it up :)

Jeez, you`re pretty good at this writing stuff, ey ? This poem had me from the first word to the very last . The first four lines were definitely my favourite . This was well done . Flow was good and rhyme scheme too . Great job .
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A great poem! I can't believe you're 13 years old! anyway keep writing my friend :) 5/5!

The rhyme in this was quite fluent.
In this I had a favourite selection of lines...
"the syllables that mean so much,
the sounds that break the ice.
each different movement of the tongue,
resulting in new life.
but the words can never seem to come,
for i can never speak,
my feelings in such syllables,
like laughter bubbling from a creek."
I felt these lines especially were very original and the descriptions were thought provoking.
On the line "they spill from pen in tears," (seventh line from the bottom) I think you meant "from the pen..." or "from my pen..."
Thanks for sharing.

Wow, awsome poem. Keep up the great work. 5/5

The flow of this poem was outstanding, i really liked it. You push yourself extra sometimes and your poems realy shine :D

xxx alex xxx

I don't like the last line and I also don't like one thing, you used -words- too many times, but the rest of it is... WOW I am in awe, really beautiful, you put your self in to this piece, it really deserves 5/5