This was a great poem with an intresting style and wording choices.....before i nevr read a style like that and i believe this is one of the best.
I really like the stanza where you touch the issue of life and death, i believe you made a great point there
we know the reality of the life and i agree with you death is overated..
once again great poem with great concept.
a 5/5 from me as you really deserve it.

Not something that I actually like. I like the stanza structure and the last line but it doesn't grab my attention. At times the flow seemed a little forced but overall good. It's actually something nicely written just not something I like.
"Hope for love
dream forever"
I do admit that I also like those two lines for the words.
~Faith-less

Nicely written, I don't think I've ever read a poem like that and I really liked it :D Nice wording, too...I like the topic, it makes sense actually lol, well great poem~!
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~The Broken Soul~

This suprised me with it's grace and eloquence. I don't usually like poems that aren't written to a 'normal' rhythm, but this one exceeded my expectations...you did a very nice job with it!
~Midnight Sun
Btw-I like how honest you are with comments. I read one of yours on someone elses and while everyone else was gushing over a crappy piece you put it to him plainly. Very nice. Hopefully you'll be kind but honest when commenting on my own. :)

Omggg
i LOVE the way u used those words
fly cry breath see believe
in each stanza that was FAB!! loved it!
Geo
gave this a 5
keep writing
its different and effective
if u have time please comment my latest?
xoxoxo

Maybe i'm wrong but what i get from how youve written this poem is that this poems meant to be read aloud. anyway i like the minamilism in the words of this poem. as there is between 1 and 4 words in most lines. this gives it a sence of urgency and power. i also liked the depth of this poem.
Great work.
Love is the law
Love under will.
Rocky