All Fall Apart

by Julienne   Apr 17, 2007


You are my best friend
Or at least you were
But that day my life cam crashing down
You were the one that did the hurt

A simple pad
A simple list
On which named were placed
How could this pain
That cuts so deep
Be because of haste

The order of those name
Oh why
Do you care to consider
That I thought you were my mate
My everything
I trusted you

Or doesn't it really matter
Til its all too late
But I won't tell you the hurt
That wrenches my poor heart

I'll just have to watch this friendship
All fall apart....

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  • 17 years ago

    by Infected with His Deadly Love

    I liked it. The flow was good and the emotion was show.
    Sadly some friendships don't last.
    But it can be for the better.
    Keep it up 5/5

    |Sarah|

  • 17 years ago

    by Hidden Feelings within these Words

    I agree with Tyanna on this. It was a good message you wanted to be read, but it was slightly off with a few typos, and such. It isn't easy writing friendhip poems, so it is pretty good. Keep up the good work, you'll only get better. Thanks for the comment on mine. =)
    -Ally

  • 17 years ago

    by isabel

    It's a very nice poem, the flow seems very good, though it get's a little bit confusing for me in the 2nd stanza, but it might be my english knowledge...

    It's also very sad, but i can relate to it...
    keep on writing...

    *isabel*

  • 17 years ago

    by tyanna

    Hummm.. This poem confused me a little.. About the pad with names on it...Humm..There were some typos but that's not that big of deal it just makes it a little more confusing and messes with the flow..
    I give it a 4/5

  • 17 years ago

    by amoxi

    Again another great poem, i was a little more confused about this poem for you mention a pad with names on it like a blackbook list for people you want to hurt but then you mention that you were once friends, so i got a little confused but otherwise a great poem

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