You say that you know this poem isn't the best... And you're right. But rather than put yourself down, right off the bat, may I recommend that when you write you save it to your PC before posting it here, then review it a couple of days later? I aim to be helpful to our club members, but what you've said about your own poem is true.

Plus, I note from your profile you're a New Yorker. I should perhaps point out that in England the phrase "when i feel like a dump" means "When I feel like going to take a crap"! Ahh, the language barrier! ;-)