Comments : Chill of the air

  • 17 years ago

    by Shad0w0faPh30n1x

    This is a very good poem terra, i give it a 5/5!!! keep it up!!!

  • 17 years ago

    by Marcus

    Good poem
    you used alot of imagery in it it was good

  • 17 years ago

    by HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG

    This one didn't strike with me either, it needs to be organized a bit better... "and enhancing the stone cold mountain peeks" Capitalize the a in and to match the rest of the capitalized lines and change peeks to peaks... "and covering her eyes with a tine fake laugh " Again, capitalize the a in and, and change tine to tiny...

    "Solemn she speaks with her riddles
    of ocean land and sky
    Not a single silent moment for this child
    for she is the world, she is chaos"

    ^^ Solemn she speaks with her riddles makes no sense the way it is written, change solemn to solemnly and it will make much more sense. Capitalize the o in of and put grammar between ocean land and sky to make that line: Of ocean, land and sky. And than in the last line, capitalize the beginning word once again. Other than that, adding some grammar and organization to this piece could really bring it out. =)