Very good first poem Jami. I think everyones first poem is their best and most important. It's a very short, yet simple poem. It was well written and organized. Keep up the good work, 5/5

I love it!!! Its really touching and i can feel what the girl feels.

Very touching, lots of emotion. I think people can relate to this. This is a pretty good poem for a first time. Keep it up!

Ohhh that ending was so beautiful!
You certainly seem to have a way with ending your poems.
Emotion shines through the words, it flowed well throughout and the longing is clear.

Well written. I liked this if only the flow was just a little better, Flow makes it easier for the reader to follow the poem but still good job. 4/5

I LOVE this poem, only you better not think that...because I will have to kick your butt lol...sorry you know I have to

I like this one. Something I can most definately relate to. Its short. but you get everything out in the lines you have, so it doesnt really need to be any longer. Nicely written. :)

I'm finding myself giving you more 4s and 3s than 5s, and I think this poem helped me understand why. You make quite a few capitiliztion and punctuation errors throughout the writing, so please go back and edit those. I do, however, like the passion you put into the poem, and you chose a nice topic and appropriate title.

This is a nice poem. I can relate to this poem. it was a great read. 5/5

Kalee

Oh, very nicely written and so heartfelt, but just to let you know every person has a different kind of beauty. your beauty can be something that no one else have in this world.

great job.