Destiney

by Xx Eternal Fantasy xX   Apr 17, 2007


In life we must learn to give in
This is destiny, and it lies deep within
We make choices, taking paths we're destined to take
Taking risks we're destined to take

Give into destiney, we can't change it
The only thing we can do is live it
Our life will come to an end the same way it was made
In one second, our life can fade

In our life, people will walk in and out, come and go
Sometimes we just have to open the door and let go
If we hold on too much, we'll get hurt
Fall down, become torn apart

At times, we are down because things aren't going right
Suicide isn't the solution, life is precious, hold it with all your might
Don't give up on life, keep in mind that there's light
Somewhere in that dark room, you'll find a switch and everything will be bright

So live for today
As if right this second, you will go away
Because no matter what, in this world you can not stay
No matter how long your path of life is, death will be on the way

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  • 17 years ago

    by Infected with His Deadly Love

    Good poem. The message is clear to the reader.

    'So live for today
    As if right this second, you will go away
    Because no matter what, in this world you can not stay
    No matter how long your path of life is, death will be on the way'

    Loved it ^^
    Keep it up 5/5

    [Sarah]

  • 17 years ago

    by Vanessa

    I loved the idea behind this. You did good. well pinned nice flow, I had to read it twice to understand some of it, but that is probaly just me. Anyways 4/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Startle Me

    It's good
    But nothing really caught my eye.
    No offense.
    I just didn't find it all that exciting to read.
    I paid attention to your format.
    I'm lovin' it :].
    Out of all.
    I'll still give it a five.

  • 17 years ago

    by BeautifulxMess

    We make choices, taking paths we're destined to take
    Taking risks we're destined to take
    ^Try not to put two of the same words that close together for a rhyme.
    Okay, I love the message you have behind this poem. Very cute.
    I hope you didn't get offended by my advice. I'm an honesty commenter. But I must tell you that you can't become awesome at first you have to work your way up. I learned that comments like this helped me. I hope they help you too. You should keep writing because you'll only get better at it. God Bless 5/5
    Thank you for commenting my poems!
    <3Tayyyy

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