Comments : Oh, Bright Morning Star {Septuplet Tanka}

  • 18 years ago

    by tyanna

    Although this isn't really the kind of poetry I tend to like, overall I think this was a good write.. I do have one suggestion.. When you wrote "softly sing a song to gentle crying children" Maybe instead of "gentle" you should put "soothe" Great job though! 5/5
    Tyanna

  • 18 years ago

    by AlaSkA

    Im not a very natury guy.. but i think this one could change me. haha, i like this one becouse its in another form of poetry that isnt seen often.
    good write overall.

    tom/5

    ps. masqurade with the gods is a good line.

  • 17 years ago

    by Romancing the Darker Side

    This is an excellent piece of poetry considering the tight syllable count. You used fabulous imagery, and it was very nicely penned with great adjectives.

  • 17 years ago

    by Cherise

    This poem was very interesting to read, i like how you have it set up in short 5 line stanzas. In ways this poem reminds me of somthing Jim Morrison would have written:p Thats a compliment :) great job

  • 17 years ago

    by Ashleigh Skye

    Wow! I loved this poem. At first I was kind of reluctant to read a poem on nature because I dont normally tend to get to involved in those kinds of poems, however this one was written with such flair, that it seemed to me that you really felt what you were writing and you didn't just pick this topic because you hadn't done it before. You wrote it with such passion that even if I didn't like stars I would be compelled to at least give them a second look next time they were out in the sky. Well done. And congrats again on picking a unique style.