Oh, so sad
but written so greatly
you are a great writer, keep it up
another 5/5 from me

Your poem makes me feel peaceful, and you have written it very well. :) I to enjoy writing free verse.

I liked the way you had written:
Snuffed out, like the life of a dandelion

and this speaks more than it seems at first:
I wonder: how fervent is the hand,
that erases his own writing?

a deep piece of writing, just the way I like them. thanks! :)
Marjan

You have a way of taking your thoughts and putting them on paper that makes your writing so deep. i like it. great poem. sad, but still great. nicely done...

You have a way of taking your thoughts and putting them on paper that makes your writing so deep. i like it. great poem. sad, but still great. nicely done...

5/5 what an interesting write. your style in the poem is very unique and the words you use are flawless. excellent job. =]

Nice poem! you used a lot of good words in this poem! good job!

"Meet me under the power lines,
In the pewter sky of November."

I don't think the first two lines are as strong as it could have been, but it's still a good start.

"Snuffed out, like the life of a dandelion."

I can understand why Marjan liked it so much, but it is not what impressed me the most about your poem.

"Though they are... [Still like statues]
Can they hear me?"

The last part pulled it together.

"I wonder: how fervent is the hand,
that erases his own writing?"

I read this part over three times, and each time it just gets better. -This- is what impressed me the most.

You ended it perfectly.

Though I may not be the best writer, I still know what I like.

Bravo.

5/5

( )_( )
(='.'=)
(")-(") Arrivederci!

I love the similies used in this like (the life of a dandelion) and (still like statues). The poem promotes the iea of sorrow and pasion into something. Your work is really well expressed :D

xxx alex xxx

Now I liked this
it was a deep and meaningful poem

This is a very deep and unique poem, full of meaning and it flows naturally, though in free verse...
keep on writing...

*isabel*

Nice one it is different and makes you think a little. I liked it:)

Wow.. great job.. i like this poem a lot.. i love how it can be interpreted in many metaphorical ways with a much deeper meaning

I read this poem three times.
First time, I had no idea what you were
Talking about.
Second time, still no idea.
Third time, a little bit.
But what does this have to do with
Paper Cranes.
I'm thinking about ghost.
You're talking to someone
About meeting them
To see ghosts.
That's all I got.
Sorry.
It's pretty cool.
Just confusing.
I'll give you a 4/5 :]

Deeply amazing.The word choice was brillant, the emtions were strong. This is truly an imprssive peice of work. 5/5

Wow I loved this peice each line made me feel something completely different that then last one. Wonderful job.

Wow loved this!! So sad wow i dont know what to say so much emotion is such a short piece. Well done 6/5 even tho thats not possible but it was really good :)

I'm not sure why the title is what it is, yet I do.
This is a really weird poem...but, yet, it's so wonderful. It's not quite an "Oh, wow" poem, but it's up there. [And for me to say that about a non-rhyming poem; be proud.]
Nicely done.

xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 5.5

I really really love your style. The way you write really makes me have to sit and process the poem to really get it. That, I believe is what poetry should be like. It should cause you to take the time to take it all in. Very good metaphors on this one and great vocab you have there. Keep it up, you definitely have talent.