WOW craig
what can i say
this poem is full of passin and love
anyone who has been of love can understand this,
for me this poem has a personnel meaning as i bet it has for many others my fave bit is this
"The most beautiful star in the sky
to her i'm not ashamed to admit i cry
but my heart is exiled in babylon she hijacked my soul and ransoms my life said she wont undig her claws till she's my wife and even apologizes whether i'm right or wrong"
to me i love that bit ask me why i don't know it just has a hold over me i love it
craig yet again you have out done yourself
your already on my faves and if i could give you more than 5 out of 5 i would
i love your work and i don't think that will ever change i love your work it's unique and you put your stamp on it
i carnt tell you how much i love your work
so i guess i better shut up and leave so i have some more praise for your next master pieace
well done hun
all my love
lorna
xxx

sorry spelt passion wrong and i repeated my self three times saying how much i love your work sorry
lorns
xxx

WOW!!! Awesome poem there. I love the rhyme pattern. I believe its a,a,b,c,c,b. Im not 100% on that...havent had to think abt that in a while. Correct me if im wrong. But newaz....i loved that poem. You just dont even know!!! "And even apologizes whether im right or wrong.' This i know oh too well. This is somehting one does because life is too short to worry abt who is right or who is wrong. If you did that, you would never have time to actually live. I used to and remain til this day to do that. I apologize all the time, especially when im wrong because i find that the lil things like that are unimportant to argue abt and so you apologiuze so that you may simply move on. Thats very awesome of her to do. I know the feeling of doing that. Swallowing your pride and taking a hit for the relationship's sake. I know you two are going to be very happy together as will me and Amber. 'My slumber has been marginalised, my peace of mind been brutalised, and my social life has been expunged as well!' I know how you feel here too. Your sleep is not of importance to you if you get to talk to your baby, and in doing so you no longer have a personal life outside of it. Its like you come home everyday and do nothig but wait until you get to talk to her. That is wat ive grown all to accustomed to doing myself. Everyday i come home and i just wait until my baby comes online or until i know she wil b able to talk on the phone. I dont go out much anymore because i spend every min of my free time talkin to her.....and i love every second of it. As im sure you do. And as for your peace of mind. It occurs to me that neither of our peace of minds will ever truely b at peace until we are finally with our true loves. However, the only thing that makes that wait barable is talking to them b it via the phone or over the net. Very great job with this poem. There are more good parts but i dont wanna take up all the space. I loved this work of yours. One of my new favs! Keep em coming if you will. Thanx in advance. Take care, good luck to you and yours, and God Bless us all!

-Seanny

Awww Seanny..you're sucha nice guy!!! and you were right aabccb..anyway...willc omment on this later baby, want to read it another 100 times first...just wanted to say for now how much I loved it and YOU even more..and how every word you can direct right back toward yourself baby..cause I feel the same think you might have a clue of that by now tho...Love always, Michxxx

This brought a lump to my throat while reading through this sean. Your sensitive love for amber and your aching longing for her has been so clearly written, through every single line that it was as if you were peeking into my head and writing about me. I can totaly relate to everything in this piece, so much so that I found some of it quite painful to read. for someone as relativly young as you, your skill with words shows amazing promise. i so wish i could have had half your talent when i was your age! dont ever stop my friend, it would be a waste of a precious gift.
That first line, so sooo true. when your heart is besoted with someone so unique and special, words become a hinderance and sound clumsy when trying to give voice to the sensations that are churning away inside. you end up repeating the same words so many times like `beautiful, sweet` etc that they soon develope into a cliche and sound trite. `you make it easy to be myself` again brilliantly put. you know when you have found the right person when you can just be yourself around them, no pretences, no putting on a show because they love you for who YOU are, not what they want you to be. `true love` as you so rightly say.
`scared this was only a dream` oh the insecurites that go hand in hand with being in love. the fear and terror of losing something so magical that has made life an exillerating* experiance that jus the thought of it disappearing sends shudders down the spine. how the h@ll would i cope, how could I go back to how it was torment restless thoughts. but every couple at the begining of a relationship goes through it, they are perfectly natural feelings. all part of being human. but i seriously doubt that is going to happen as she has `promised to never leave`
`deep down inside my core` love that line. amber has gone inside you to the very crux of your soul. she couldnt go any deeper. again i know how that feels. its only when you are in love with someone do you realise how deep and sometimes apparently endless emotions can go. and its only when you are in love with someone and look back on your life before they appeared do you realise how empty and shallow your life was, how cold and uncaring the world is.
`watching beautiful Cali sunset` never having been to your country maybe im betraying my ignorance here sean but i assume you mean california, and if so i can picture that romantic image quite clearly having grown up watching tv programmes such as starsky and hutch,columbo, to name a few. seems like a wonderful place to be with a lover, walking along the beach hand in hand as a pacific `breeze` blows into your true love`s hair. wonderful imagery in those lines. makes me want to go there!
`we connect on many levels` isnt it wonderful when you are in love and discovering your partners many layers, realising the more you uncover how much more wonderful they become, how similar you two are and smiling constanly as they say things exactly how you would say them, thinking same thoughts etc. starting a sentence and them finishing it for you. and love the `boo`. why do we all do it? weve all been there giving our sweethearts pet names that if you had heard before your meeting you would have just thought `What? pass me the sickbag!`. but when submerged in the romace just trip off the tounge so naturaly you start to use them w/o even thinking about it. im sure Freud or some other psychologist could explain why but i love those little mysterys, keeps them enchanting and special.
Im rambling here so i will try to wind this comment up sean, but cant resist quoting a few more lines that i can personaly identify with `no harm will come your way` wanting to protect and shield your true love from all the crap and bulls*it that people and everyday life brings,`...kills you makes you stronger` such a true maxim, only affliction and suffering can build character.`can hardly believe your real` yes know that one so well, being with someone so wonderful and special that they defy every preconcieved notion that experiance has taught you.
this poem is amazing, there isnt one weak line here, everything you have written compliments the previous line and builds on the `true love` theme. i applaud you sean, i could never have written this. i really hope from the bottom of my heart that you and amber are united before to long and have a happy future together. on this evidence of this poem no one could doubt your feelings for this girl. thankyou so soo much for you comments on my poems, always enjoy reading your views. 5/5 top marks

oh bummer posted in wrong place, was meant to be in seans `true love`