by David johnson Apr 18, 2007
category :
Life, society /
about society
People walking round blind |
by Love Panda
Very noticible forced lines. the two line rhyme scheme is nice though. i love the words you have chosen to use.structure is good. just try andlet it all flow. nice one. ibe |
by Vanessa
It is a very good poem. all true too. You did a good job. good flow, keep up the good work |
by LittleWolf
The poem on itself isn't bad, but it would only be better if you'd leave more blank space, say things in groups. This is quiet hard to read without getting lost in the form of writing. |
by MaSkEdSoUl
Lol I found the last line pretty funny, anyways this poem is sssooo true, and I hate it when people buy something that looks awful cuz of fashion or whatever. Anyways great job on this poem!! 5/5 |
by xDryTearsx
Lol I like the last lines but yea very very good poem its also very true media telling us whats hot or not ya know and the sad thing is they believe it. anyways great jog i really liked it. <3 |