by ari Apr 18, 2007
category :
Life, society /
about society
The bass beats pump through the air, |
by Whisper
"Dance with a passion, |
by DavidBrendan
I like it. It's a story and it touches on a lot of different things. I think if you worked on making the rhyming better and use some alliteration or just literary techniques this poem could be a lot better. As it is now I like it so 5/5 |