Hm . Interesting write . It wasn`t great, but it wasn`t bad either . Overall, a four out of five . Some editing & revising, & I`m sure it could be better . I don`t really know what`s wrong . The words are there; the feeling, but it lacks something . Not bad though; keep working at it . I`m looking forward to reading more .
..__MiNDYY

I fell in a black abyss,
im stuck in a black abyss

i think you did really good but i think that you should change one of the times that you used abyss to a different word that means the same thing that way you use more than one meaning for the word than the same thing through out it but over all you did great!
:)

tiffany

Very powerful, the message you were sending across, was wonderful. Not all the stanzas flowed well, but it was pretty good. I agree witht the over usage of the same word. But it was good, keep writing. =)
-Ally

This is a really good poem. You are one of the lucky ones who can get over someone. Trust me I wish I could get over the guy I love, but I cant. Anyway, this really is a very good poem. 5/5

Kalee

Hmm this was a preaty good poem. Not great but not bad by any means. I really liked all of the short lines it made the poem very powerful and each line struck harder especially the ones with multipul periods at the end of them, but I'm sure that was your point. I really liked how you didnt go into exact details but you also used lots of poetic language. nice job.