by Mommy And Me
Wow jenna. i really liked this peom. some of the words seemed a little distressed and pushed into the poem. but other wise it is awsome. and i almost cried when i read it. |
What an excellent poem. I saw this contest and just couldn't figure out what I'd write about. The story here was very well described with a great message at the end. It takes courage to say goodbye. |
Jenna, I loved this poem...such emotion and sadness. I enjoy reading ur poems because they always seem to have a lot of truth and sadness to them and behind them. |
Ahhhh...AWESOME! Okay, beautifuly written, tells a sad but wonderful story. The rhyming wasn't forced. The flow of the poem was flawless. Ah wonderful! Love it! |
by ben thompson
Good write my friend i especially liked the first stanza. great word usage as well. 5/5 best of wishes |
The imagery was great. You had a very good point and I love how you described it so well. There was just something about the last stanza that didn't quite fit.. I don't know if it's how it is worded, but it doesn't seem to flow very well... |
Maybe if it was something like.... |
Im not really even sure what to say about this, its awesome. Like, I cant even fathom where you get ideas like this |
by David
Ah well done. i was gripped from the very begining. the title that is. and this was excellent! i loved how you described it. how she felt. the emotion and pain she felt. |