The wording and flow of the poem was fluidy and perfect..but i just want to take ur attention to somehwre that breaks the rhyme a lil
I like it...
This thing...maybe it's just my opinion but on the other hand it was so great to read it
Keep it up
Laura

I though this was a wonderful poem.. It was awsome to read.. Keep up the good work!

I really like the words you chose here. well pinned excellent flow. I really liked this work. good read 5/5

Hey,
I have to say in the two poems of your's ive read youve mastered the art of repitition wonderfully. "I forget it all...", youve extended the point your trying to make, its exactly what repitition should do and you have done that. Your style seems to be using repition in all teh stanza's apart from the last, considering the ocntradiction youve made from all the stanza's and the last, it works brilliantly. the hryming was good, none of it seemd forced at any point. The flow was good. The overlal poem was quite enjoyable. Keep writing, and thank you for your comment. xx

Whoa! a beautifully written, really powerful poem. the repition throughout gives so much depth and meaning to it. a really enthralling and captivcating poem. keep it up! xXx