I really liked this piece, what you were talking about, and the overall theme of the poem, but you definitely need to format it LIKE a poem. You basically wrote it as if I were reading a paragraph of random thoughts. It looks as if you tried to create some rythm by the commas, but they're just not enough to really create the structure of a poem. My advice would be to make every phrase after a comma its own line. I think that's what you were going for anyway.
That being said, I really enjoyed the rest of the poem and especially liked the lines,
"why did i take the wrong path, the past is the past leave it or believe it,"

Overall I think you did a very good job, but the structure needs to be altered. Lovely read

Luvli Poem! =] Welldone xx