This is a good poem, but it didnt end well, like the ending wasn't all that good, in my opinion. Maybe make it longer so it can flow alot better or think of a better ending.

"I promise myself with what left of my heart"

On this line put an 's' on the ending of the word "what". Fix it up a bit and it'll be perfect. 4/5

It was a spur of the moment thing if i had put more time into it it could have been a lot better lol ..thx 4 da advice