Real good without a doubt...from beginning to end...

Deep, a masterpiece clawing at the depths of human feelings. a great read with an awesome ideal.

your servant:
david

Lol . i already read this today !
it was after the WASL !

it was the best thing to read after reading all those boring selections =]

good job !

I liked this poem alot. Alot of emotion put into it. Wonderful job!!! 5/5
take care.

~Chelsea

WOW THAT was amazing, the way you used nature at the begining was awsome, awsome poem, basically i love it, the flow too and well yeah i could go on forever. 5/5 thanks for reading mines.

Well written and interesting.... I like the broken mirror symbolism.....keep writing....All the best, Debbie

Thank you for your comment, i will edit my poem and try and work it out... but this poem of yours that i read... wow it is truly amazing, not only with the depth and layers of meanings within the text, but the stucture and flow of the words carried me though the poem with great ease.. thank you for posting such an inpirational poem

This was interesting, I enjoyed it quite a bit.
I liked the third stanza, it was quite striking, and the image was original.
I wasn't sure about the fourth stanza however, it seemed a bit average. "Screaming" is an overused word and so is the "can they hear/see me?" The rhetorical questions are similar to those found in poor teen rant poetry. I can see by the rest of the poem you're a better writer than that. Maybe you could edit this?
Thanks for sharing.

Luved this, and i luved u're sight. yea, this poem is off da meter doe. keep writin' and i'll keep reading

I see myself,
My reflection cracked.
Blood seeping from the sky,
The whole world gone whacked.
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Love the image that gave me. The whole poem is detailed very well. I wish I could write something like this when i'm just 'bored'...lol. But i dont think I can anymore. Anyways...I did enjoy this poem. I've read a few of your writings...you've got great talent...i'm sure you know that but yeh. Keep writing!! take care/

` Liz =]

I like the imagery, nicely done!

I see myself,
My reflection cracked.
Blood seeping from the sky,
The whole world gone whacked.

Notice me,
As I reach out grabbing.
Searching for a hand,
To help the struggle that I'm having.

^^^^ Those two verses seem to mess up the flow of the poem, ruining the end. It seems that they need an extra line each to fill up a gap.

Besides that, the poem, I must admit, was kind of/sort of dull, and it lacked that much emotion, although it proved you are good metaphorically, and that you have a good vocabulary.

To refrain from breaking your "5.0" streak, i will vote it 5.0 but it's more like a 4 in my book..

Still, good job.

5/5
~Stephen White

Very deep and excelently written you had great imagry it was very good keep it up

Another good poem. I loved how imaginative it was. You are a great poet. Keep up the good work. ^_^

Excellent work!!...beautiful work..kept me hooked through out frome the start to the end...u've creatd vivid imagery thru your perfect word choice...good wrk!
Kp it up!
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