by xo kisses xo Apr 19, 2007
category :
Sadness, depression /
lost relationships
Theres scars on her arm |
by Im not broken anymore
Omg very strong this is really good i know i keep saying tha but they all are lol |
Hey, first of asll thank you for your comment. Now about the poem, i really enjoyed the emotion in the poem. It's a sad topic of self harm and suicide, its filled with emotion and is really heartfelt. Youve got a kinda story inside with your words, i very sad story at that. Your flow and structure weree both ok. None of the rhymes seemed forced at any point, and you had a good rhyme scheme going on. To improve i suggest you use punctuation in your work, i think taht would help the poem loads. Other then that a good read. Keep writing. xx |
by Mandy
Buh-oo-ti-ful |
by Sara
That was amazing!!!! great job!... drew told me he read this one, and he wanted me to write on here that he liked it a lot!! haha... but yeah 5/5 from me, and youre amazing |
by cindy Maahs
Wow very powerful makes me want to cry in a good way if that makes sense. I feel the pain and understand. Very well written! |