The angels are calling

by Vanessa   Apr 19, 2007


He lies there in his room in ICU
Oxygen on his face
His mind and body there
His spirit's in another place

The angels are calling to him
Wanting him to join them

Everyone is crying
When they go to visit
They can see it in his eyes
They know that he is dying

The angels are calling to him
Wanting him to join them

His daughter speaks to him
He can only squeeze her hand
She tells that she loves him
He lets her know he understands

The angels are calling to him
Wanting them to join them

He gives up the fight, he will never win
Just letting himself go
Closing his eyes, he's not hurting anymore
In his last breath, he prays for his sins

The angels are calling to him
Wanting him to join them

But now that his spirit moved on
And there is a smile on his face
No one questions
That he found his place

They angels are sitting with him
Glad that he joined them.

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  • 17 years ago

    by Simple Sensation

    Wow.. i have to say i loved the repitition of this poem;
    "The angels are calling to him
    Wanting them to join them"

    I just love how youve written this, andt e reptition seems really strong. It works brilliantly. Good range of vocabulary youve used hear, and youve got a few rhyme's. It has a good overall flow to the entire poem. Its filled with emotion and i loved that about the poem. To improve i suggest you use punctuation. Other then thata good read! Keep writing! xx

  • 17 years ago

    by Simple Sensation

    Wow.. i have to say i loved the repitition of this poem;
    "The angels are calling to him
    Wanting them to join them"

    I just love how youve written this, andt e reptition seems really strong. It works brilliantly. Good range of vocabulary youve used hear, and youve got a few rhyme's. It has a good overall flow to the entire poem. Its filled with emotion and i loved that about the poem. To improve i suggest you use punctuation. Other then thata good read! Keep writing! xx

  • 17 years ago

    by Synh

    'The angels are calling to him
    Wanting them to join them'

    The first them should be him.

    Anyway, great poem. Not as good as your others but definitely deserving of a 4/5. Great craftmanship and well penned. The flow was a little off throughout the poem but i liked the idea behind it. :)

  • 17 years ago

    by Teria

    This made me cry.
    You did a great job.
    And, I loved the repeated lines, and the ending that goes with it.
    Keep it up, sweetie.
    5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Melpomene

    There was a few mistakes in this poem but i think overal it had a great meaning throughout it. It held alot of emotion and i loved the voice at the start of it. The idea behind this was portrayed nicely. Well done on this poem~mel

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