Too far

by firexdancer   Apr 20, 2007


I stand here on a mountain
face up to the sky
i see all the birds,
as without me they fly.

hands reach out to touch their wings,
as the hills roll forever,
the river spinning in their depths,
untouched by any weather.

tears pouring down my face,
falling into cloud,
the wind taking them away,
sun tearing out the shroud.

my fire trying to escape,
the burning of my heart,
bubbles coming up my throat,
being torn apart.

i want to go and fly away,
to touch the shining stars,
but my wings won't hold me all the way,
the sky is much too far.

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  • 17 years ago

    by Nix

    Very interesting poem. It is touching and emotional. You created great atmosphere and flow is excellent too. It deserves 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Choose xX Alex Xx Life

    Not your best, but still well above adverage. I found this more readable than most poems. I like the soft approach you have in this poem.

    xxx alex xxx

  • 17 years ago

    by TheWorldFellNUWerentThere

    I loved the last stanza! Such a great write. I really liked the picture you painted me!! 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Choose xX Alex Xx Life

    Really nice heart felt poem hun :D

    xxx alex xx

  • 17 years ago

    by Simple Sensation

    Hey,
    I really enjoyed this poem as it was quite unique. It was an intreesting read. The first stanza got me intrested in the poem, i mean it creates this image of flying, and i think loads of us would just love to be birds and just fly away. The poem had a good stronge rhythem, the hrymes didnt seem forced and it worked with the overall poem. I liked the ending line, "the sky is much too far." i just love how this concludes this poem. Its a simple ending, your poem kinda shows us how it would be like to fly creates the image and then that stanza in particula that line just beings us back to reality. A good read, keep writing! :) xx

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