Interesting poem. The structure is rather... random, I suppose I could say, especially near the ending. However I really enjoyed reading this poem.

"Slumping over the (empty) deing bush." - by 'deing' I presume you meant 'dying'?

Overall - good job.

I really enjoyed the description in this poem. The imagery was, as well, fantastic! I think you could have extended this poem farther, with maybe a little more feeling. I felt the emotion in the first stanza but after that I kinda lost interest. Nice usage of vocabulary.

Alesia