Hey,
nice poem, the flow is sometime a little odd but its mostly okey, also i think nees should be needs. if im wrong, sorry..
good work 5/5
kisses stephanie

The title was -- wow.
Really captured me & made me [want] to read this poem.

But sadly the poem did not have the same effect. Your structure could be improved.
It seems forced in a few places. I think you could improve this but it still wasn't too bad.

=]