"The last bird fleets" fleets doesnt really make to much sence.
The third line in the third stanza seems a little bit to short and it kind of throws off the verse.
"As the sun shines light" hm.. personally I think that bright would have been a bit better word for this one.. light seems kinda off. The other verses seem preaty good the only other thing that I can critique on is the line "as people make joy" people dont make joy and it kind of confused me..

other than that of course I really liked the poem my favorite lines were by far,

"Let me be your shadow,
Because moments move fast."

I agreed one hundred percet moments do move quickly and we have to do everything we can to keep up with them.. nice job.

Ok i llllllllllooooovvvveeeeed this poem it was so beautiful it reminds me of bright colurs and bunnys and stuff

xxx alex xxx

"As people enjoy,
You don't want to be the last
Let me be your shadow,
Because moments move fast"

^ I loved this stanza. It really summed up what you were wanting to say.

Excellent. You're a talented writer.

The last bird fleets

That line didn't seem to make sense to me. I think you ment "flees" Or something along them lines. Other then that i found this poem to be interesting. Quite sweet. Well done on a nice pome you have here~mel

It's a very sweet poem of how you will be there for your friend no matter what. It's a very nice poem and I like it alot. I love the emotional imagry here, it speaks of another deeper feeling underneath it all. Very very well written for sure!! 5/5!!

Much Love,
.:Danielle:.

The explanations were so powerful like the wording
It was so sweet and touching
Keep it up
Take care,
Laura