It is the red jelly,
On a jam tart

personally i found that a bit clumsy and perhaps forced. But it may be your style i would have to read more of your poetry to understand this further.

maybe
red is the colour,
that burns in your soul,
its the boldest of people
those of big roles.

dont know just a stupid idea maybe

please read 'The bodys' rain'

Well written. Great flow, nicely pinned I love your choice of words. expecailly the poppy thing. (I can't remember things excatly long enough to quote what you wrote) 5/5 keep up the good work.

I loved this poem
Although it seemed that you were
Repeating some stuff, though.
I kind of found the beginning funny.
I don't.
It was kind of random.
Lol.

I think its a sweet little poem ,well done.

Excellent poem, well worded and a nice flow to it,you did a great job on this piece, it was written very well, with a lot meaning to it, keep it up. your friend Tracy dean 5/5

I liked it, but it seemed kinda like it ended right in the middle.. I think with a bit of work it could be great.

:)