The Broken Friendship

by Ammi   Apr 21, 2007


You promised that everything would be alright,
That we would end this crap and we would not fight.
Because of this i slit my wrists
But wait there's more, there is a twist.
As you watch me slice again
The pain gets stronger by 10 times 10.
You think it's stupid, wot i do
The pain i go through becoz of you.
We started off great, the best of friends
That we'd be there for each other
Even wen our lives bend.
But wot the hell happened, where'd we go wrong??
A broken heart, cannot sing a beautiful song.
We are too different like cats and dogs
Just not meant to be together.
Do you feel, the pain i feel??
A wound thats thre and just wont heal.
Again and again i slice my veins,
Like a horse set free, i have no reigns.
I'll slice once more, then i'll die,
I'm not expecting you to cry...
But wait, wot's this i see a tear
In your eyes, i also see fear.
I wasn't expecting you to worry
I didn't think that you'd be so sorry
I hear a faint whisper in my ear,
"Don't do this, I'm sorry, I now see clear.
I can feel your pain, i before couldn't see!"
...But it's too late now, there's no more me...

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  • 16 years ago

    by Sourav

    It's a good try and a emotional poem. Liked it... you'll be better in time. Keep writing!

  • 17 years ago

    by ASPHYXIATED

    The only problem I found here was the flow was a little forced.
    I have a few suggestions to improve this, not telling you to change it but just for future refrence. :]

    "You promised that everything would be alright,
    [That we would end this and no longer fight.]"

    By making the line shorter it makes the flow stronger because the structure doesn't change for each line.

    "But wait, wot's this i see a tear
    In your eyes full of fear"

    Again just making the flow more steady.

    Your grammer and spelling really should be improved, people will then take your poetry more serious.

    :]]

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