by sHaTTeReD4SiLeNcE Apr 21, 2007
category :
Sadness, depression /
lost relationships
Long lost in the abyss of darkness |
Don't get mad for my criticism, but "But as time pass by" should be "But as time passes by" , and that's about all I see wrong. Altogether it is a powerful poem! I am getting so tired of telling other poets that the shorter the poem, the stronger it should be, and this poem is very strong, and full of emotion! Kudos! |