Good one i almost cried (really) sorry for the loss...
5/5 like always youre a BAMF at poems keep it up

Hello I really liked this. It was a very nice poem. It was skilfully written and the format worked well. Sorry for your loss. Take care. 5/5
cheers, josh

This piece is so extremely heart breaking.. it was beautifully written.. very, very amazing.. true passion, 5/5, if not more.

perfect.

-heidi may

Awesome poem...sad... very good... check mine out..

I have never read a poem quiet like this.
But i loved it.
I loved how your rhyme was "aaba - bbcb - ccdc" & so on. It was different and took me a stanza or two to figure it out.
but it really made the poem moe original & i loved it.

The poem was full of emotion being as its in memory of something.
The title stood out to me as a sad poembut it was more than i expected.
great vocab too. :]]

Brilliant poem of pain ,heartache and losing someone close to you,great write and well worded, I can relate I lost my mother to cancer ,it's tough keep up the great work ~5/5~ your friend Tracy,,,,,,,,,,p.s thanks for the comment

I'm sorry for your loss.

I loved the style you used here. At first I was going to comment on using the same word too soon after each other, but then I realised you were purposely doing that to fit a style and I began to like it.

Very sad but beautiful.