Wow this is really good. i never seen a poem like this before, so i defiantly enjoyed reading it. you did such a great job on it! and it flowed nicely too. keep writing 5/5

~Kristina

It's a good poem.
But the flow is weak.
It would be better if you erase
All the unnecessary words.
For example:
And.
I think the readers would understand
What you mean without it.
And, to me at least, it flows better.

Hey,
its a nice poem, i think that the flow is great and i love your choice of words.
great work 5/5
kisses stephanie

Oh Goran, I dont mean to make u upset. I was joking sweetheart,lol.
Dont you think it is your fault I dont know her, what kind of friend are you? you should let me know her, that s what friends are for, right? that s what you use to tell me....
but I'm sorry my email made you upset, poor gore,lol
but hey i helped you to write another poem, give me some credit for it.hahahahaha
honestly nice poem, and dont forget we all love you dear.

:'( sniff sniff you're not gonna write anymore?? but those are your best poems, the ones about her! ::cries a little:: i'll miss those poems, b/c this one, like the others, was absolutely amazing and beautiful. you're just amazing, and the feeling you put into these heartbreaking poems is so touching to me, you really should keep writing. although i don't know why the girl doesn't want you, she should fall head over heels for you after all these poems. 5/5 to the most amazing poet on here!

Wonderful poem. The flow was flawless, the choice of wording was good, & the emotions were great. I can honestly say that I have never read a poem like this & I like the concept - it's different. 5.5

Stephanie Lynn .+.

Oh gee. this was a different poem to the rest. something more hidden and hurtful bout it to. yet love is there. in its own way.

your style of writing is excellent. i can always read your poems. they flow well and are very enlightening.

5/5 david

Wow i am seeing my name in the list.
goran, i don't know how to start this.any poem you wrote so far has touched my heart, i so feel like they are my own story.
i know they are just poems for you but it seem like we have a commen story or your fiction poetry is my real life.
you told me you do not write for anyone, if not then why are you writing this one? is it because our notes helped you to have an extra poem in the list? i don't think so because you are a true poet and you know your aim. I know this is true because like i said i have similar situation and i will for sure write something like this if anyone tell me forget her,
but in my note all i did, i asked you if you have a real situation like that and the way you write about her, im sure you deserve better than a person like her.
I hope i have not made you upset for something i don't mean it. i am sure the other persons feel the same as we all use to your poems and the persons you wrote, we all agree that you are the best poet.
take care my friend and i am also sending you a personal email so i hope you replay this through my personal message.

Truely sad Goran....what we feel inside is bound to flow forth in our words of poetry. Expressing the hurt and frustration of a broken heart is part of the healing process. Never stop writing....All the best, Debbie

Awww how sad. well you shouldnt worry about what other people think, because like my mom told me "if they are your friends they will be making you happy and giving you advice not making you sad and not giving advice".
if you want to right about the one you care for and the one you love then do so dont hold all your feelings inside because true feelings for someone you love arent meant to hide.
good poem 5/5

I don't know her, so I wouldn't judge her. I liked this poem it was good, wwritten in a way I haven't much of. Very well put. 5/5

Very nice, love the message 5/5

This, I Find to be thos most beautiful poem you have written so far, Im speechless over it. The message behind it was great and this was truely amazing. A flawless poem you have written here. Emotional penned poem with a great meaning behind it. I find that this was truely heartfelt and showed how much you do love this one lady. Well done~mel

The ending was quite different..so is the topic of poem...if she was worth your love,she would be precious and lucky...Maybe i again talked about her but i'm sorry..i should give this masterpiece 5/5
Keep it up
Laura

Very interesting

It's an interesting subject matter, but overall I found the context shallow and the language lacking.

I thought the free-form style of the poem lent to the overall mood of the material, but in some places it was quite distracting.

Why did you capitalize the first letter of every line?

line7: shouldn't it begin with 'some' to parallel with line6? If not 'some' and 'they' are not the same and cause confusion.

line15 & 18: 'get' isn't a very attractive word. It's extremely overused and doesn't add anything to the poetry. Find a more explicit word to elicit more response from the reader.
*also, i don't think the repetition of these lines helps. Reword it to add to the substance.

Line 17: type 'dosn't' should be 'doesn't'

Line 21 & 22: first off, the quotations aren't needed but it is especially distracting on line22. Also, I felt you should relate their idea of 'best' to yourself. You don't know what best means to them, but do you know what it means to you? Draw the reader in and flesh out the characteristics and emotions of the narrator more.

Line 32 & 33: grammatical: 'truth' shouldn't be plural. 'Them' should be 'it'

Last 3 lines: failed to draw heavily from the rest of the poem. Also, is 'leave' a typo? It doesn't make sense: should it be live?

Like I said, I do like the idea behind the poem but it has two major drawbacks: punctuation and depth. The punctuation is heavily distracting and obstructs the flow. Also, the narrator seems very disconnected from the poetry. If this was intentional I would suggest reconsidering: the poem is about love and how other people have responded to it. But in the end, how the narrator reacts to this and subsequently feels is what's important (as indicated by the last stanza).

I duno man, some one your in love with can mean the world to you, and it doesnt matter what other people think. love is a shield that lets such comments slide right off. try not to let doubt, amung other things let these feelings/comments get to you. the woman you write about seems worthy of your words to me.

Hhm hi goran its been long time i didnt read any poem w/u and its my pleasure again to read some of urs... honestly u really great writer for me and this kind of poet it seems so real coz u cant write like this if it is not real right? great start and end of this poet.. very great and just keep on writing hope u more better and better. god bless!

Ok, i got this message from a reader who didnt want to bother and share this with the readers, but for me my readers are everything, they are the reason I can write, so i will share her message and leave it on you guys to judge it....

"as u r poem goes, its u who doesn't deserve her, everyone misjudged her for ur sake,,,,,,,i am glad u came to realize that, becasue with ur word u decieved manny people, just take care,,,,,,goodbye for ever, even though u wouldn't bother say th at much,,,,....goodluck with ur school and life.........""

i have not touched a word of it, and im not saying from who cause she know it herself and i guess she was not brave enough to write it here, but i will do that much for her.

Grammar is important. but your poem is really sublime.