Hi,

I see you in the message forums and wanted to see some of your work. It s refreshing! You really have your own style, I thinkthat you words would sound great to music too - maybe rap?

Keep up the good work, I will be reading more of your poetry :-)

Honeypot x

Well Stephen I think this poem expressed a lot of emotion! I think you did a grand job at this poem. I loved it. The rhythm/flow was a tad off but that's alright your expression took away from that. This poem showed a great deal, of love.

I need your face to be in peace,
I need your being to be complete;
I need your voice to sleep at night,
so I can, once more, feel alive

^^ my favorite stanza I loved it and the flow was amazing and it all just fit perfectly! Nice job
xoxo kaila

Hey,
a very creative and nice poem, you just use 'I' alot, but it doesn't bother me..
well i comment alot of you poems today and i think that you're an amazing writer, you truly have talent, keep up the good work and good luck with everything =) 5/5
kisses stephanie

Hey.. this poem is amazing and i know, i can tell it comes from true life experience doesnt it? I am very happy to actually read something that comes from the heart. You are truly talented and i hope you take it with you always....

I bet this comes from something you actually went though. i almost feel this though your written words. the flow was good, nicely written, you have an amaxing talent, to put things in a way that most people wouldn't think of. 5/5

Damn poetry is a good way to express your feelings. I didn't find this odd at all and you wrote it beautifully. You described it so that we can picture in our minds your feelings. Great job
cheers, josh

Well done. Kinda hard to follow along with.
The flow was a bit shaky. Well done though.
Very powerful. God Bless 5/5
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I can relate to this poem. very very true the words just flow. i think you have a real gift. great job!

I actually really like it...and i don't think its odd......i do want to kno where do u get all of the beautiful and meaningful words u use...do they just come to u or what???

I love it , it was amazing , you could feel the emotion behind the words .

Is it weird that some parts of this i saw as a possibility for a song. ?

I'm breaking as you reduce me
into a lonely heart.
You don't even have a clue how bad this passion burns:
[3rd degree]
(my fantasy)
my love, my lust, my yearn.
Taking in this hope
that maybe you, someday, will learn.

^^^^^^
I saw this as a chorus, which could be repeated. something i think you should put a guitar too.

Really good poem so emotional well done