Hey David,
another deep one by you,
this is so great. but dont forget we should never let someone make us feel down as this life has too much brightness, it dependon us how to find it.
i dont know if i have told you this before, but i use to be deeply in love with a girl and she changed her feelings, i was hurt yet someone told me to ignore her as this world is full of other persons and everyday we met someone new, that was so true, now years later i realize i should have let her go before cause life is too short to be spent for a person who does not deserve it... we are here to enjoy so just smile and have fun.lol
but great poem though

I like the idea of this poem, it's fairly unique. The flow was a bit off at times, but mostly good. There is a lot of emotion in this, which makes it really good. The ending was really strong too. Making a stand for the pain you have been put through. Well done on this David. =] 5/5

Tammie

David
Great job on this piece. Your pain comes through in the words you have penned. Take Care Cindy

Good job David...well written and sad. Your words convey great feelings of frustration and heartbreak....All the best, Debbie

David,
This was heartbreaking. I hope this isn't true. Why do we ever let love go this far?
Take care.

This is an excellent poem David. The flow was wonderful. 5/5

Kalee

Wow very dark nice 5/5

A great write ,sad and yet so well done ,touched my heart with every word.

Good job David. I liked it. keep it up!

Wow very good a lot of sad emotion running through it excellent work well done 5-5

Oh... DAvid! don't be so sad...plz it kills me when your sad. this poem was so beautiful i loved it

Excellant Work!! ^_^ Wow... It was beautiful. Keep writing please!! 5/5

Wow i loved the poem but people can't hold you back and mack you want to die ... i have tryed and it isn't the way to go
keep write your wonderrful but be safe

Omg I loved it! very very nicely written and perfect

Wow, excellent poem, powerful poem.....keep writing!

Lovely!
I don't know how a dark poem can be Lovely but this is.
It was so deep.
I loved it.
5/5

Amazing
Elaine

Wheww, a lot of emotion in that. haha Great poem!

Excellent poem, you had some very good lines in there, and the flow was impressive. Superb work, keep it up.

I really liked it, it was very emotive
I especially loved the last 2 lines, they were very final and a good ending.

T_T