Oooh! i want to pick my favorite part in this, but i love the whole thing!! what i like is that u do have an excellent word choice, but i can still read it, u know? like i don't have to stop every second and ask myself what the hell some word means... grrr, i hate when people do tht! but u didn't, so sall good! anyways, i can't wait to read more of your poem!
5/5

This is really good
<3 jess