Excellent!

Nicely done, the flow is great it suits your topic well, short but very descriptive.

keep it up!

I love the bit about a bright life
turning black and white! You did
a great job with musicality and
vocabulary, bringing the reader
to your state of mind and world.
This is a beautiful and heartfelt
piece. A pleasure to read!

Take Care,
Smiles,
*N

Awwww i love this poem so full of emotion.great job!!= )5/5

Cory

Wow, this is sad. I felt like this once. Definately on my favs. 5/5

<mOnStRiTo'S pRiNcEsS>

This is so sad, and it is so easy to relate to...your word choice is perfect and its just so beautifully sad... *hugs*
5/5
- ali xxxxxx

Very good....i liike the rythme of the poem!.....

and the rhyming mad sence like u used to words that made sence in ur poem not just 2 random words just so ur poem rhymed great job!

This is beautiful. I could really see and feel like I was there with you. I loved the flow. Great job!!!