"ly = lie" as a side note.

On to the poem. Your free verse is really coming along!
You have the emotion nailed and the language is spot on. You can feel the loss in the words.
Well done
5/5
*Gem*

(P.S. Don't worry, it feels bad now but your only 14, there'll be tons of guys =)

Very good!! i know how you feel.. Most my poems are about my ex.. i though he could of been the one for me but he had other plans..
but dont worry.. your young.. there will be more boys!!!

Such a great poem to read..one of your better ones, i liked it. Sucks about the boyfriend, ive thought before bout my girlfriend...but $hi* happens ive been told @_@

Wow!...the emotion is so well penned in this one.very baeutiful work...excellent word choice!
Lovely write!Kp it up!

xxPoojaxx