Quick Infatuation

by Marcus   Apr 23, 2007


It hasn't happen this quick before, it usually takes a while
But I find myself infatuated, with her beauty and her style
I want you to need me like every word needs a vowel
If you need someone to be there, you got my number to dial

If loving is wasting time can we at least waste our time together
Well it wouldn't be wasting time as long as we with each other
My feelings coming out now; even the ones I tried to smother
Dealing wit feelings is scary especially when expressing them to another

I just hope that in the end of whatever begins
That you by my side and we more than friends
and we'll be connected more than Siamese twins
And have wild fun knowing God will forgive our sins

All I need you to do is accept me even with my flaws
and grow with me; fast or slow, just without any pause
And I'm writing this for a round of applause
I just felt like it so I guess you can say I wrote it just because

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  • 17 years ago

    by HUGIYDAWY

    Omg this poem is REALLY sweet.... i love the words you used and it just gave out soo much feeling and emotion i LOVED it!!

    i love you as a writer. you are brilliant!
    much love .xx 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Startle Me

    I love the first line.
    It's pewfect.
    Lol.
    The third line didn't really make sense.
    How did a towel come into a place?
    It's good, though.
    There's an air of mystery around it.
    I'm lovin it.
    Still.
    4/5?

  • 17 years ago

    by Hidden Feelings within these Words

    I didn't like this one nearly as much as "Somewhere in Darkness" I agree with the others about, slang, taking the time to fix errors, or the way it is worded. I think your messages in your poems are excellent, the way you write changes the way people look upon the message.
    Work on the slag and vocabulart. And it'll make your poems far better than you think. You have great potential. All in all not bad. =) 4/5
    -Ally

  • 17 years ago

    by AlaSkA

    Arash and slavetomusic said what i would, there is room for improvment and the vocabulary you use, can use some help. give yourself a broader mind when writing, and dont rhyme just becouse you have to. alot of your lines look forced. (just tips)

  • 17 years ago

    by Mommy And Me

    I liked reading this poem as well. it shows an emotion that is so often over looked and so many people can remember the feelings as they read your work. it is well defined besides a few spelling or word errors every now and then. instead of posting right away try waiting a day and then re-reading it, you will be surprised at how many words are messed up a little bit. good work :)

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