It ain't happen this quick before, it usually takes a while

Shouldnt it be "It hasn't happen this quick before, it usually takes a while

You have some slang words in this poem that need to be changed such as "wit"

but other then that this was cute i liked it although i found the flow to be off a little in some places. Good effot.

I liked reading this poem as well. it shows an emotion that is so often over looked and so many people can remember the feelings as they read your work. it is well defined besides a few spelling or word errors every now and then. instead of posting right away try waiting a day and then re-reading it, you will be surprised at how many words are messed up a little bit. good work :)

Arash and slavetomusic said what i would, there is room for improvment and the vocabulary you use, can use some help. give yourself a broader mind when writing, and dont rhyme just becouse you have to. alot of your lines look forced. (just tips)

I didn't like this one nearly as much as "Somewhere in Darkness" I agree with the others about, slang, taking the time to fix errors, or the way it is worded. I think your messages in your poems are excellent, the way you write changes the way people look upon the message.
Work on the slag and vocabulart. And it'll make your poems far better than you think. You have great potential. All in all not bad. =) 4/5
-Ally

I love the first line.
It's pewfect.
Lol.
The third line didn't really make sense.
How did a towel come into a place?
It's good, though.
There's an air of mystery around it.
I'm lovin it.
Still.
4/5?

Omg this poem is REALLY sweet.... i love the words you used and it just gave out soo much feeling and emotion i LOVED it!!

i love you as a writer. you are brilliant!
much love .xx 5/5