I like this , it was diffrent. very simbloic (I can't spell today) The flow was just alittle bit off to me. Maybe it is just me i don't know, but it is still a good read. Keep up the good work. I believe that you are really talented, and that your poems will take you far in life. 4/5

There's not many commas, periods, and such. Which does go good with this poem. But, I think that "That stains the dirt" Should have had a comma in it. It's the only line that stood out, that had no punctuation [sp] but seemed as if it needed it.
When I seen there were no stanzas, I was like oh no! Because, I dislike most poems without stanzas, it gives it less time to sink in and such. But, this was the perfect example of one that did not need stanzas.
It like kept me on the edge of my seat, and I had to read faster and faster to get to the end. Lol. :|

You did a great job.
Overall: 5/5

Wow this is really good. i really like the topic of the poem. amazing job. it flowed nicely. 5/5

~Kristina

I thought that was a pretty awesome poem. I liked the originality, and the symbolism as well. Nicely written indeed.

Take Care, Sole.

So dark but so well written it had a kind of era to it like you understand something we dont lol cooooooooooooooool

Unusual yet cool. Dark yet great. It holds some great imagery and the metaphorical way it's done makes it even better. The beginning is a little shaky start but it progresses smoothly to the end which I found quite interesting. Not my ideal poem but nice nevertheless.
~Faith-less

This was a bit weird of a poem, but the flow was good. 4/5

Wow, this is a crazy poem. I liked it though. I can see you wrote it from hate. It was good. 5/5

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